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The Forgotten Muse's avatar

This is gorgeous!

It reads like a cosmic love poem merged with a metaphysical meditation.

Fluid and timeless.

Thank you for blessing us yet again.

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Marissa M. Zhu's avatar

this feels like watching two consciousnesses dissolve into each other through language itself 🦭 the way "our pens collide and depart like reeds" makes writing feel organic, almost accidentally touching then drifting. ✨linguistic intimacy✨

the whole piece breathes like one long inhale where boundaries just... stop mattering "where I begin, you end / where I end, you begin again" reads like spiritual recursion, an infinite loop of becoming each other. the formal play with those internal rhymes (skin/within/begin/spin/win) creates this hypnotic pull, like being drawn into someone else's rhythm until you can't find your own edges anymore 🏺

"fingers sing in lyrical calligraphy" might be the most beautiful description of collaborative creation. bodies becoming instruments, making visual music together. then that shift to "ātar of us" using the sacred fire reference... turning two people into something almost alchemical.

the ending kills me: "forever limitless, where dualities align" 🧊 not dualities merging but aligning, still two things but moving in perfect parallel. cosmic spin that never quite touches but never quite separates. gorgeous gorgeous.

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